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  • jawsee · 4 months ago
    That whale is a huge jerk D:

    I had a feeling that was going to happen.
    I must say I really liked it though.
    It was nicely written and quite captivating.
    Maybe you should write that book after all.
    I'd buy it(:
  • jawsee · 4 months ago
    Oh, something I didn't say in my previous post:
    I believe the ship's name should be capitalized.
    Also, this seems a bit repetitive:

    "The work on the vessel, aptly named the adventurer, was hard.

    It was hard, but solid work."

    Maybe if you incorporated "solid" in with the previous statement, it would flow better. That's just a suggestion though.
  • joshualyford · 4 months ago
    haha i reread it like two seconds after i posted it and noticed that. good point!
  • natashaaa · 4 months ago
    Well that was an unfortunate ending. I liked it, though. It was very well written.
    It's also nice to see a different, more creative side of you, other than the dopey little ginger kid (that came out a little more offensive-sounding than it was supposed to) we see riding his bike around at shows (who is obviously equally loved).
  • joshualyford · 4 months ago
    haha dopey! i think id be more like stoney the dwarf
  • natashaaa · 4 months ago
    Seeing as Stoney isn't an actual dwarf I never took that into consideration. But yes, you and me both, brother.
    Speaking of, it was my whole-hearted intention to congregate a... gathering of the stoney dwarfs in Iowa City back in July but seeing as how SOMEBODY wouldn't get off of their fucking bike, that never happened. Let's reschedule for St. Louis or Kansas City, yeah? My treat.
  • britt · 4 months ago
    So as I was reading it, I was pretty much reading it like a childrens story. I was expecting a whole Narnia type adventure to unfold... glad it didnt. At the end I smiled and thought "You go, Whale!"
    Nicely written, I liked it.
  • joshualyford · 4 months ago
    haha grumpy-whale appreciation i love it
  • Angela · 4 months ago
    I really enjoyed this. The ending didn't fit with my expectations from the style of the rest of the story, but it's short enough that it wasn't unsatisfying. It could obviously use an edit, but you've definitely got a solid story here. :)
  • joshualyford · 4 months ago
    ill run through it with a fine tooth comb for sure
  • helloimclaire · 4 months ago
    I liked this a lot! You should post more.
  • joshualyford · 4 months ago
    i will!
  • iAlex · 4 months ago
    bloodly hell dude, that was really good!
    twas very well written, i definantly didnt expect the ending. i liked how the ending was what you would expect to happen when someone stays in water for too long, instead of the whale having "magic powers" or something so the kid cant die..it was different , and i really really liked it :)

    ok that probobly didnt make any sense...its 2 am and i should get off the internet and go sleep...

    ohhh
    also. guess who found out that you guys are gonna be at soundwave? meee :D
    ive already told my mum im gonna bomb the house if i cant go...so in the case that i cant go (which is NOT going to happen) would you happen to have any explosives i could "borrow"? :)
  • joshualyford · 4 months ago
    haha thanks alot! and yeah we'll ship some dynamite for you if need be...
  • iAlex · 4 months ago
    haha awsome, thank you! alway good to know where i can get dynamite if i need it...
  • joshualyford · 4 months ago
    massachusetts finest dynamite proprietor
  • brittanyjane · 4 months ago
    Wow good twist at the end. It was written very well though. Good vocabulary! I am curious to read more.
  • joshualyford · 4 months ago
    thank you! i plan on posting more occasionally
  • jeremyrichie · 4 months ago
    i enjoyed it, very visual and descriptive. It seemed to have a dark over tone even with the jolly whale taking him to see the depths of the sea, the whale smiling makes you think he has some way for the boy to breathe at the last minute, then he drowns.
  • joshualyford · 4 months ago
    haha yeah i dont know what my problem was when I wrote this
  • jeremyrichie · 4 months ago
    sometimes we just write conflicted shit haha.
  • michelle piraino · 4 months ago
    is the story complete? what if it was all a dream, and he was really just wet in his bed maybe some of the sailors pulled a first timers prank on him and drenched him in water. that would be a twist. but i do like the cunning wit feeling that the whale has to his character. it makes me think of what the whales would do in whale wars. I really loved it though, talking whales rule!!!!
    michelle
  • joshualyford · 4 months ago
    haha i have a pretty serious rule i follow, dont trust smooth talking whales
  • Matt · 4 months ago
    As I was reading it, I thought it was going to be something like Flapjack where he lives in the whale, but it was totally different.
    It was very creative and I loved it!
  • joshualyford · 4 months ago
    thanks dude!
  • ninamalone · 4 months ago
    Nice twist at the end! I liked it a lot. Thanks to my over active imagination, I could picture it all in my mind. :D Your a good writer, Josh!
    Love to see more of your short stories!
  • joshualyford · 4 months ago
    thanks ill definitely be putting more of them up!
  • MelissaaAnn · 4 months ago
    Good story, I like that its so descriptive.
    I also liked the ending, I didn't see it going in that direction. Nothing better than a sociopathic whale.
  • joshualyford · 4 months ago
    haha thank you, the whale rules!
  • dwightSchrute · 4 months ago
    dude this story makes me wanna go hunt some whales really bad
  • joshualyford · 4 months ago
    haha i like the username
  • tay. · 4 months ago
    I enjoyed that, it reminded me of an aesop fable.